Some of the connwcting devices in the passage were their, which, that, for instance, e.t.c. All these transitions (connecting devices) helps the reader understand better, and knows what to expect in the next sentence. It also helps the reader to not get confuse in the next sentence, if it is going off subject. Transitions helps the writer to cross from one point to another, instead of being all over the place. One thing that was not used was the word I. Using pointing words help get the reader attention, an example from the book page 113, instead of just the word “this” it is better when used like “this ambivalence toward demoratic societies”. Repecting helps if the reader do not understand it the way one’s writting it, so the same sentence should be repected but in a different, more understandable way.
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